How is my Poem?

Constructive criticism: You need a lot of work. Please Don't let that discourage you. It's awesome to have the want to express yourself. Self discovery is a great topic. Everyone who achieves any level of awareness goes through it. Keep on working on your writing and it will improve with time and life experience. Keep reading a huge variety of poetry and fiction. Don't try to emulate any of it but feel other people's flow and find your own.